First Cut feedback
There is a clear narrative to this opening, good use of a variety of camera shots and angles, as well as a great use of a dolly shot. This is clearly a film opening, but needs some more work to polish and finish it. Here are my suggestions. I would also like you to ask some contemporaries/parents for feedback and embed the first cut into this post.
Suggested changes/improvements:
Add Institutional Logo
Add titles
I would like to see a c/u of the main protagonist at the beginning so that the audience can start identifying/ understanding her a little.
Tighten the shot on the letter - it is a little too slow.
Possibly shorten the walk up the stairs.
Tighten the letter exchange - make it a more natural pace.
Add SFX to create an atmosphere (ensure you create your own or use royalty free sound effects)
Tighten the end of the dolly shot
Are you going to add any music?
Do a colour correction to add the neo noir feel.
Feedback response:
ReplyDeleteI will continue working on my movie with the help of this feedback to improve the quality of it.